Writer’s Notebook Update…featuring Brad and Tayla-Jade’s writing!

Our Writer’s Notebooks are under way! We are beginning to fill them our ‘seeds’ that spark ideas for new writing pieces. We use different graphic organisers to help us display our thinking.

Here are a couple of student examples of writing, complete with their descriptions about how they went about composing and revising their drafts.

Brad’s draft in his Writer’s Notebook

The Writing and Revising Process ~ by Bradley 18/4/13
We watched a clip called the Gate of Youth on www.literacyshed.com to get ideas for writing. The clip was funny and it was a good way to get ideas for writing because it was interesting to watch.
I chose to write a narrative about a scientist because I like writing stories and I love science. I decided to write a story about an old man who went through a time machine to get younger. I liked being able to choose my own topic because it meant I was able to write about things I like, like science.
I wrote a draft first. I was thinking as I was writing about creating a new and different piece of writing, not just copying the clip. I had to think about interesting words otherwise the reader would get bored reading it. I made the middle and the end up as I went along because they just sounded right. I chose to have a sad ending because I didn’t want it to be like most books which have happy endings.
When I was revising, I read over my writing a few times. I needed to change a few words because some parts didn’t make sense. I added some words to take the place of some words I had to rub out. I chose to put in more interesting words.
The next stage for me is to get someone else to read it. That will help because sometimes I read it quickly and over and over so I think it’s right. If someone else reads it and there is a word that’s missing they can point it out and I can change it.
I think I have improved writing a lot because in Grade 2 I couldn’t think of anything and just wrote goofy stories about living roast moose and silly bats that didn’t make sense! Now I am a more experienced writer!

Tayla-Jade’s draft in her Writer’s Notebook

The Writing and Revising Process ~ by Tayla-Jade 18/4/13
I watched a clip to get ideas for writing. When I was watching it, I was thinking that the man’s family might come and try the Gate of Youth as well. So I decided to write a narrative about this.
I drafted my story. I had to think about what was going to happen in the story and how I’d make it interesting for the reader.
When I thought of a new idea as I was writing, I had to think about where I would fit it in.
When I finished my draft, I reread it a couple of times to add in interesting words to make my sentences more interesting. I had to make sure that all of the words were spelt right and that my writing made sense.
I used the Revising Cards and chose a strategy from them to edit my writing.
I have improved by creating interesting sentences. I don’t care what other people think, I just write about what I want and write what I think sounds good.
The next step for me as a writer is using a variety of words. I would like to write longer stories.

What strategies do you use when you are writing?
What do you think you have improved on and what is the next step for you as a writer?